DawnPatroleum
Recruit
As far as I can see, there are only three minor punctuation mistakes. See below.
"It's armies scatter foes before them." ---- "It's" is a contraction of "it is" and it should be "Its" since it is a possessive pronoun.
"The strongholds of proud tribes crumbled beneath it's engines of war." ---- As stated above, this should be "its" not "it's".
"But also even in the worst hours, a time of courage and defiance." ---- There should be a comma after "also". ---- Example: But also, even in the worst hours, a time of courage and defiance.