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I don't mean to annoy you here, but it's still wrong. "two bireme ship was was caught" should be "two bireme ships were caught" and "was washed to the sand" should be "were washed to the sand". I have no idea what the beginning of the last sentence is even supposed to mean, but I can't help noticing you have adjectives as subjects at the end. If I understood it correctly, I think it should be "either play as a Greek and fight off the invading Romans, or play as a Roman and defend Brutus".
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A more accurate version of that text would be:
"It's 146BC, King Phillip of Macedonia has been defeated by the expanding Roman Empire, who have now turned there attention to the sacred soil of Greece. Two Roman biremes have been caught in a storm and washed upon the sands near the Greek town of Thermon. Thousands (you could put hundreds of thousands, but i don't think there were that many people in Greece at the time) of greek soldiers are marching towards the stranded romans. Play as the Greek's and fight off the roman invasion, or play as Rome and defend Brutus" (possibly "survive the Greek onslaught" would be better at the end there since Brutus is not mentioned elsewhere in the text)
hope that helps
"It's 146BC, King Phillip of Macedonia has been defeated by the expanding Roman Empire, who have now turned there attention to the sacred soil of Greece. Two Roman biremes have been caught in a storm and washed upon the sands near the Greek town of Thermon. Thousands (you could put hundreds of thousands, but i don't think there were that many people in Greece at the time) of greek soldiers are marching towards the stranded romans. Play as the Greek's and fight off the roman invasion, or play as Rome and defend Brutus" (possibly "survive the Greek onslaught" would be better at the end there since Brutus is not mentioned elsewhere in the text)
hope that helps
Historian, at the end of the first line, you have "there" where it should be "their". On the fourth line, you have an extra apostrophe on "Greek's". And I still think it should be "play as a Greek" and "play as a Roman", since you're playing as a person, not a faction.
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