[AAR] Phoenix Rising
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Mixedpotatoes
Master Knight
It's great.
But, in the game, are you playing as Gilroth, and simply telling the story in the boy's eyes? Its a very unique thing
But, in the game, are you playing as Gilroth, and simply telling the story in the boy's eyes? Its a very unique thing
Stildawn
Squire
Im playing as Gilroth. The boy isnt actually a in game character (im just pretending he's part of my warband).
This gives me more liberty in telling the story since its from a watched perspective meaning that the main "Gilroth" doesnt get to see everything thats going on etc... So I can setup surprises for the Main later on.
This gives me more liberty in telling the story since its from a watched perspective meaning that the main "Gilroth" doesnt get to see everything thats going on etc... So I can setup surprises for the Main later on.
Mixedpotatoes
Master Knight
Stildawn 说:
Yes, youre the first to do this in any AAR, its very enjoyable to read though. Perhaps in later chapters you can change the 1st person?
But anyways, its very good. just wait, theres a storm of good comments brewing
Mixedpotatoes
Master Knight
I thought the boy would grow up as a warrior and get revenge over Gilroth who is killed later... but thats just me
Stildawn
Squire
Haha.
The boy does grow up to be a warrior, in the next chapter he will be more war like (as you can tell the chapters are not one after the other, there is time inbetween)
Later on in the story Im even gonna say that years have passed since I think things in Warband change a little too fast to be realistic (like becoming a king in like 100 days or so haha hardly realistic I think)
The boy does grow up to be a warrior, in the next chapter he will be more war like (as you can tell the chapters are not one after the other, there is time inbetween)
Later on in the story Im even gonna say that years have passed since I think things in Warband change a little too fast to be realistic (like becoming a king in like 100 days or so haha hardly realistic I think)
I love the third person viewpoint. It allows for extra interpretation of in-game actions. Good work.
Mixedpotatoes
Master Knight
Stildawn 说:
I like
* The way you edit your pictures (keep them that way, but avoid using it in battles, you want to blur images in battles, not oilify them)
* Your writing is 90% grammatically correct, and you write very spacefully, making it easy to read, although it is a lot more scrolling.
* The story line in general. Just dont do the same things over and over.
I dislike
* I dont really know. Perhaps that you called Iyindah for Lyndah
Stildawn
Squire
Mixedpotatoes 说:Stildawn 说:
I like
* The way you edit your pictures (keep them that way, but avoid using it in battles, you want to blur images in battles, not oilify them)
* Your writing is 90% grammatically correct, and you write very spacefully, making it easy to read, although it is a lot more scrolling.
* The story line in general. Just dont do the same things over and over.
I dislike
* I dont really know. Perhaps that you called Iyindah for Lyndah
- I try to make them look like a drawing/painting, as in the grandfather and grandchild are looking at the drawings in the book lol. You'll notice the pics in the prologue (aka reality lol) are not like this and are normal. Ill play around abit for the battle shots then so they are perhaps not so drawn looking and more clear.
- Haha Ill take 90%, Ive never been good at grammar. I like to space it out for that very reason as I personally hate trying to read massive bodies of text, especially on a computer screen.
- Thanks, glad you like the story so far, I dont think it will repeat much and if I have to Ill try make it different and unique through dramatisation.
- Hmm I have to check that then, I copied the spelling of the name off Monnikje map lol, either I read it wrong or he spelt it wrong haha.
I say, jusy keep going with what pleases you, Stildawn and let the rest of us, "Get over it." Your style pleases me and I'm not sure someone else's idea of style would be any better.
Mixedpotatoes
Master Knight
We are patiently waiting, the lack of comments is because of we dont want to stress you
Mixedpotatoes
Master Knight
Felonious 说:Mixedpotatoes 说:We are patiently waiting, the lack of comments is because of we dont want to stress you
Screw that, I WANT MORE!
If there is a typo in there I blame you!
