The story so far is too generic and pretty linear; nothing that we haven't all experienced. Which is kinda sad because the writer seems to have the knack for writing stories. I specially like the writing style. Simple yet interesting and descriptive enough to make you want to go on and read the whole story. Why don't you try to deviate your story to something more unique? Something that is more personal. And also what is lacking here is a main storyline. Why don't you focus your narrative more into the mystery that is your father. So instead of just wandering around aimlessly and detailing your day to day experience, why not go for specific goals connected with your quest to know more about your father. It would make us, your readers root for her more.
sample:
With your bodice stuffed with peshwan bread and a bottle of rare Singalian wine safely tucked between your legs, you were about to tiptoe out of the tavern mess hall when you thought no one was looking. But when you overheard what the hooded man seated in the next table say to his drunk companion, you stopped cold in your tracks. They were talking about the fabled Ninety-nine Chests of Valonbray, a stash of treasure beyond imagination that went missing on the day that Ser Gavino de Valonbrae, twenty-third of his name, and the descendant of the famous merchant-adventurer from Barclay who founded the town of Valonbray, disappeared without a trace thirty-five years ago. You stopped cold because you heard him mention your father's name and a certain silver locket in the shape of a curled-up sleeping dragon, much like the same one that is currently dangling on your neck.