Well after some time I finished part 2 of Vengeance. I hope you all enjoy it. I had more time to put in to this one so hopefully there will be some improvement. Any comments, whether they are critiques or praises are always appreciated. Especially interested in the devs opinions as I am trying to incorporate their mod into the story.
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Vengeance pt2
King Ingveld looked at the thousand bodies laying before him. His elite raiding force had been mowed down with what seemed to be no effort. He had men searching for any corpse besides his men’s that could hint at who and what army had done this. Then a thought crept into his mind that made a chill run down the old king’s back. What if an it did this? Not a who but a thing, a thing of mythical powers.
“Sire, over here!” a man shouted from his left. He went and found a single corpse. He had his men continue searching while he examined the corpse carefully. This man was covered in wounds from head to toe, many of them fatal. Had someone stabbed him after he had died? No that would be pointless. Could this man have done all this? No, that was impossible. But try as his men might there were no other corpses that were not Valahir. Still the man’s corpse looked human. The king scratched his head. There were no more mysterious attacks on the Valahir, so the king forgot about the incident. A thousand men were not so rare in these times of war. Still word traveled and scholars of Galwe started searching through the texts for an ancient weapon capable of such destruction.
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Eranas ran. He ran swifter and faster than he had before. Clutching a bow in his right hand, the young elven boy moved swiftly through the forests. He had one task in mind, on goal at hand: Vengeance. The voice screamed for it and he had to satisfy it. He wanted vengeance and this voice spurred him on wards. He thought of nothing else, only watching the blood spill forth from the bodies of the bandits who had killed his parents. VENGEANCE! The voice pounded in his head like a steady drum. The word echoed through him every time he heard it, as if starting from his head and travelling down to force his feet to run even faster. VENGEANCE! VENGEANCE!
“Damnit, John you won again.” One bandit yelled angrily at the other. The other said not a word, he simply reached his arms out and moved a small pile of aurums towards him. “I still don’t see how you get so damned lucky at cards! I see everyone lose to you and somehow you have yet to lose yourself.” To emphasize his point he waved a Tolranian king card in the air near his head. The other bandit, John, chuckled. “I almost think you're a che-” Suddenly there was a twang then a whizzing sound and the card slammed into his companions forehead, embedded there by an arrow, and man slumped over, dead. John stood up and reached for his staff but before he could grab it he heard the twang and whizz again. He looked down and for a brief second before he died saw the arrow that had plunged through his heart.
“What the devil is going on out there?!?” A man shouted from inside the cave. “Someone go check it out. If they are dozing or playing cards again tell them they can kiss their suppers goodbye.” Half a dozen men grabbed their weapons and lazily hobbled out. As they emerged they gazed around seeing nothing through the thick elven forest. Suddenly there was twang, then a whizz and suddenly one of them fell to the ground. Suddenly very alert, the remaining five raised their shields and glanced around them. They felt fear as they noticed the two men who had been placed on watch dead. Suddenly the sound repeated, twice, and two more of them fell to the ground, dead. The other three were now only holding their shields up for fear that if they turned and ran they could not escape fast enough. Suddenly they heard it again, and again, and again, and they fell one by one almost as if to a drum beat.
By this time the remaining bandits realized something was up. They all gathered up their weapons and prepared to leave the cave. One of them poked his head out, and at that moment they all heard the same sounds those before them had, and the man recoiled back, an arrow in his forehead. The bandit leader, realizing the archer or archers could pick them off if they stayed like this commanded a charge. "Get those archers lads!” As they rushed out the same sound repeated over and over, in perfect rhythm. The arrows came from different places always with a short pause between them. Confused each man charged where he thought the archer was firing from and they split up without even realizing it. Then there were screams as some of the men disappeared into the forest. A small group remained clustered around their leader. There was genuine fear in their hearts. “H-Hold here m-men!” The bandit leader said with a trembling voice. Then out of the forest ran a young elven boy. They were all surprised. “Boy get down there is a killer somewhere in those woods!” Then the boy charged into one of them and began beating him. As another guard came to drag the boy off, he wrestled the sword out of his victim’s hands, leaped into the air and thrust it through the second man. Landing gracefully, he swung the sword so it sat on his shoulder and, for a brief moment stared at the nine remaining bandits. Then he leaped through the air again he landed on one man's shoulders and used him to kick off into the air again slashing two others as he went. The first man collapsed from the force of the boy jumping off him. Then the boy simply charged into the remaining ones. The blade whirred and whistled through the air smoothly cutting through the bandits till only the leader remained. The leader foolishly turned and ran in fear. With a flick of the wrist the sword flew from the boy’s hand into the mans back. The boy then retrieved the sword, and used it to kill of all those who had simply been knocked senseless.
As he finished off the last of the survivors the voice slowly quieted down. He had heard it only for a few hours, yet as the voice became absent he felt his strength slipping from him. The sword fell from his hand and he fell to the ground. He knew he was going to die, no scratch on his body but he knew. This was the price for vengeance, his life for theirs. He knew that he had not done this alone. Then he saw a man. The man was pale, and shadowy like a specter. He saw no facial features except a mouth and glowing red eyes. Where the rest of his face should be, was smooth as if the rest of his features had been rubbed off. He was whispering something, but the boy couldn't make out what it was. Then just before he died, he heard the word, not many words but only one over and over, “Vengeance,” the figure said as it walked off.
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Galwe had been abuzz with recent activity. The scholars were trying to figure out if some new weapon had been developed, or perhaps a drug where large groups could be killed by single warriors. That was when a he arrived. An old Maccacvian mythologist claimed to know what it was. The man looked almost afraid of what he was about to say to the other scholars. “What we have is no weapon, or at least not any man made one. Something ancient has returned, something that has slept for a long while. A very old, very evil creature.” One of the scholars snickered and laughed, “And what do you say this ancient evil is?” After a long pause the mythologist took a long pause and spoke.
To be continued...
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